Funny Sentence From An English Primer. . .

Concerning Words That Appeal To The Five Senses.

Quote:

Without Sensory Images
The computer room is eerie.

With Sensory Images
In the computer room, keys click and printers grate while row after row of students stare into screens that glow without shedding any light.

Endquote.

I would have preferred the second sentence to read as follows:
In the humming electronic and florescent hell of the computer room, students' pastegrey faces stared gapemouthed as a lowerclass, muddy demonface appeared on every monitor and proclaimed in a rising tremble whisper, "You have no soul. You have no soul."